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Someday - A Rough Composition!
by kamokronos Sun May 04, 2008 4:39 am
Well, I was sitting down at my computer desk, typing Chapter 14 (which still isn't done...because of this...) and I got hit with this idea for a song: "Someday". Well, I just went on with my roll, and made this very rough composition. Its not that great, but I thought some of you guys (and girls) might like to read it.
Well, the song is really about a person (I don't know who (Its not me) who is thinking about the future (Hence "Someday".) Well, they think about who they are going to meet and fall in love with, and where they are going to end up in life.
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- Sunlight fading away
The sky from blue to grey
The day is ending but someday
It will be dawn again...
I look into the mirror
Wishin' I was then
Seeing your reflection
Right next to me...yeah...
Someday, I'll be all alone...yeah...
And someday, I'll look up to the stars...
Again...
Someday, I'll be a thousand miles...From here...
Yeah...
And someday, I'll be gone...
Forever...and ever...
I can see the sun rising
Its morning already
I wonder how much time has passed
It just always seems to go too fast...
Then I saw your face
In a broken place in my heart
And I wondered if
Someday, I'd know who you are
Someday, I'll be all alone...yeah...
And someday, I'll look up to the stars...
Again...
Someday, I'll be a thousands from here...
yeah...
And someday, I'll be gone forever...
And ever...
Seems like 20 years have passed
Since I saw your face...and eyes...
Yeah...
But here we are now...
The "someday" I was dreaming about
Can't keep track time
Its going way too fast
I just can't keep up
The future seems far away...
But its not...yeah...
All we have is the present
The past fading away
The future unaccounted for
But somewhere...its someday
Well, the song is really about a person (I don't know who (Its not me) who is thinking about the future (Hence "Someday".) Well, they think about who they are going to meet and fall in love with, and where they are going to end up in life.
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Re: Someday - A Rough Composition!
by Digger412 Sun May 04, 2008 12:13 pm
I like it, but it's a little short for a song isn't it? (long instumental gaps? lol). Have you ever tried writing a song before?
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Re: Someday - A Rough Composition!
by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo Sun May 04, 2008 1:55 pm
HEy, hey hey! really not bad! I actualy wrote a poem a while ago (keep in mind that I am in grade 6..) I think it's pretty reasonable. Also, If u guy like it, I got a mountain of riddles to go on. (btw Im writing what i remember of it off the top of my head, so spelling might suck sometimes) Edit: I added a few more lines to make it longer, Lol, And I did that in like 5 min. Yeh, I'm amazing at making good poems really fast (or, rather, making POEMS really fast....) So how do you guys like it? Here it is: 
. Secondly, For those of you who have been following, I'm at chapter 17 in my novel and I'd really like some comments, ok? And if you haven't started reading it, start now, it's awesome! That's it, bye.
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- Another poem
This is a poem like all the rest,
it's not amazing; it's not the best.
It's not a work of art; it's not shakespearian,
it's not about the many colors of a cameleon.
it's another poem, that's it that's all,
It's not about summer, winter or fall.
I can't play with it; it's not very fun;
It'll disolve in water, burn in the sun.
It's a regular poem, I'm telling you,
It doesn't describe how the sky is so blue.
Well, now I am rambling, a useless poem; so long,
I have one thing to say so you don't get me wrong;
The only thing that makes this amazing; a special dish,
Is that I can read it as many times as I wish,
Knowing that I made it, me and me alone;
I made this poem and I want it to be known.
. Secondly, For those of you who have been following, I'm at chapter 17 in my novel and I'd really like some comments, ok? And if you haven't started reading it, start now, it's awesome! That's it, bye.
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Re: Someday - A Rough Composition!
by kamokronos Sun May 04, 2008 6:18 pm
Well...I know its pretty short, and I never said it was done, y' know, lol.Digger412 wrote:I like it, but it's a little short for a song isn't it? (long instumental gaps? lol). Have you ever tried writing a song before?
Halo, why don't you try making your own thread...it makes it easier for people to find it, and judge it
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Re: Someday - A Rough Composition!
by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo Sun May 04, 2008 6:47 pm
Uh, what is a thread, and don't I already have one?! Or is that a topic? What's a thread? Oh, maybe it's like, a section in writer's lounge, I think? don't you have to make that? Ah well, we shall see. pm me with answer.
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Re: Someday - A Rough Composition!
by kamokronos Tue May 06, 2008 3:34 am
Edited, with a longer, and improved (if I do say so myself) version .
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